6/30-IELTs Writing Task 2-Aurora

Some people believe that technology has a positive impact on society, while others argue it has more negative consequences. In my opinion, I agree that technology has a positive impact on society.

First of all, advanced technology has changed the way people work and made productivity more efficient. In recent years, many companies take different types(manners) such as remote work to push their employees finish programs faster. For instance, I used to be an intern in a start-up company when I were a university student, (and) many of my colleagues were from different countries around the world. In that case, my company used online app to hold the meetings, which let employees could join the meeting at home or a coffee shop. What’s more, we also used the shared workspace in the online app to follow up the program process. This is really convenient for us to know what we work when someone isn’t in the office.

Secondly, technology and artificial intelligence have changed our daily life (positively in the regards of learning new languages). AI- powered applications provide assistance to people who in need and break many limit of time or space. For example, we can use AI app to practice English with an AI teacher, and it can find our mistakes and give us the feedback after listening our speaking. As a result, we can learn the second language without expensive tuition, even we don’t go to the cram school. It’s useful that Internet can provide free resources and solve many problems.

In the conclusion, since technology provides a lot of services to people, I think it has a positive impact on society. Although technology may have data privacy concerns and may worsen people’s interactions, it make our lives more convenient which is no doubt.

在〈6/30-IELTs Writing Task 2-Aurora〉中有 2 則留言

  1. 讚讚:
    1. 這樣的內容就是我希望你能寫出來的,很棒!
    2. 整體內容清晰,不會讓讀者讀不懂
    3. body paragraph 舉例適宜、不像流水帳

    弱弱:
    1. topic sentence 沒加上立場,不明確。如第三段的topic sentence, “Secondly, technology and artificial intelligence have changed our daily life .” 改變我們的生活,然後呢?這是無效表達!!
    2. “break many limit of time or space.” 看不懂

    錯誤部分–
    1. 單字也有待加強(拼字錯誤、冗言贅字、搭配詞)
    2. 文法錯(連接詞、let)

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