9/28-ELTS Writing Task 2- Sereina

Nowadays, influencers have a big impact on people on social media. It’s hard to know whether this influence is always positive or negative. In my opinion, I consider that the positive aspects outweigh the negative ones.

On the one hand, social medial influencers could encourage young people to turning(turn) passion into career.(On one hand, influencer can motivate others and share useful information.) For example, there are more and more person become(becoming) an influencer, not only they have interest to run a channel on instagram or YouTube, but also they can turn their talent to a job. Furthermore, influencers are the best advertisement than experts, they can promote useful information to society without any effort.(Example) the reason why is influencers share personal experiences and engage with their audience. Over all, influencers usually highly trusted by people, they are good helpers in delivering messages.

On the other hand,I believe that influencers will still bring some negative effect(when it comes to misinformation). when they spread misinformation without proper research, and people will receive false information .For instance, last year, there have(two influencers) opened a famous beverage store, which highlighted Japanese fresh milk in drinks, and two of influencers used their reputation to promote these messages to their fans and public. In fact, someone revealed the shop using mike powder to make the product .Therefore ,influencers sometimes will hiding the truth, so it’s important for us to have media literacy.

In conclusion, I agree that social media influencers have a positive impact on society. While in some cases we still need to distinguish right from wrong by ourselves, I believe that we can apply the benefits of social media influencers in our daily life.

在〈9/28-ELTS Writing Task 2- Sereina〉中有 2 則留言

  1. 大方向:

    1. 這題是agree/disagree題型,所以你應該選擇一個立場,並下去寫,但你寫成Discussion題型,討論了社群媒體的好處跟壞處

    2. topic sentence是一段文章的門面,會希望學生在這裡就要加上「自己的立場」(如紫色標注)。第三段的topic sentence, 你寫說: “On the other hand,I believe that influencers will still bring some negative effect” 會讓讀者有斷點,不知道重點在哪裡,雖然你後面馬上補起來理由是什麼,但把後面的跟前面的句子連接起來,就會很完美

    3. 文章篇幅不夠,有兩種改法–
    一種方法是延伸下去寫自己的經驗,多去描述自己的親身體驗(如藍色標注)
    一種方法是新增觀點

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