7/9-IELTS Writing Task 2-Jennie

Some believe that technology brings positive impact on society whereas others argue it has social repercussion. This essay strongly agree technology has more negative impact as not only it significantly weaken in-person social skill but also dramatically raise the risk of cybercrime.

Though the rapid evolution of technology brings tremendous convenience to human beings, for example(as well as) the widespread using of social media shorten the distance between people in different time zone, people nowadays, especially young people, have found that face to face social skill has been gradually diminished by over reliance(relying) on using social media and messaging apps. People tend to use emoji or reply with short comments on the post. The short videos and rapid feeds shorten humans’ concentration span, (and) the conversations among people thus become shallow. Young people are awkward to have face to face(in-person) conversation and it’s difficult for them to have a deep connection with others. Technology not only brings benefits on communication but also lower the quality of conversation in the real-life world.

Moreover, thanks to the technology advancement, people save massive of time on waiting in the bank and submitting documents to government agencies. However, this brings another crisis – cybercrimes.(even though the technology advancement brings significant benefits such as saving time, it also intrigue serious cybercrime issue.) Cybersecurity has raised a big concern that fraud ring using phishing website to steal people’s bank or credit card information. In terms of identity theft, cybercriminals pretend someone your are familiar with, sending message to ask for emergency(emergent) financial help. For instance, there was a tragic story on the news that a family of five fell the victims to an online scam. Sadly, they were unable to cope with the overwhelming stress and ended up their lives. The ignorance of cybersecurity might lead to financial loss and casing mental stress.

In conclusion, technology brings notable benefits in this digital world, nonetheless, it causes more drawbacks as people have less patience on genuine human interaction and  have more challenges to protect themselves from cybercrimes.