5.What do you think social media will look like in the future?
pronunciation: advancement
nice content for the first standpoint!
01.18: your private chat on instagram is leaked –> i think you can elaborate more on this issue. Like: “I once mentioned Taylor Swift’s album with my friends on Instagram, and after i jump out of the chatbox, my whole account is fed with Taylor Swift’s merch.”
4.Do people feel lonelier despite being more connected online?
nice content!
3.Why do some people feel addicted to social media?
0.32: feel happy when someone like your post –> time is a bit not enough, why don’t you add one more example?
nice content for the second point!
2.Do you think social media helps people stay informed?
0.30: earthquake news.. –> it’s really important to choose the thing you can speak more before answering. First, standpoints in the topic sentence is about “global” news, so “earthquake” isn’t appropriate. Second, you don’t have many thing to say about “earthquake”. Why don’t say “Donald Trump”, “war” ?
1.How has social media changed the way people communicate?
nice content for the first standpoint!
5.What do you think social media will look like in the future?
pronunciation: advancement
nice content for the first standpoint!
01.18: your private chat on instagram is leaked –> i think you can elaborate more on this issue. Like: “I once mentioned Taylor Swift’s album with my friends on Instagram, and after i jump out of the chatbox, my whole account is fed with Taylor Swift’s merch.”
4.Do people feel lonelier despite being more connected online?
nice content!
3.Why do some people feel addicted to social media?
0.32: feel happy when someone like your post –> time is a bit not enough, why don’t you add one more example?
nice content for the second point!
2.Do you think social media helps people stay informed?
0.30: earthquake news.. –> it’s really important to choose the thing you can speak more before answering. First, standpoints in the topic sentence is about “global” news, so “earthquake” isn’t appropriate. Second, you don’t have many thing to say about “earthquake”. Why don’t say “Donald Trump”, “war” ?
1.How has social media changed the way people communicate?
nice content for the first standpoint!