There are always a lot of debates about whether (famous) people who are famous on social media can have helpful effect or terrible effect on society. From my perspective, celebrities on social media have its own advantages and drawbacks,(.) nonetheless, I agree with the idea that influencers can lead more negative effects on society.
To begin with, nowadays those influencer tend to post positive things such as photos of their vacation or their luxury stuff(lavished lifestyle) on social media rather than share their real life. This situation may lead other people to be jealous or be upset about their life which is not as wealthy as those celebrities.(having audience easily feel upset about their life) For instance, some people may suffer from mental problems because of being depressed and unsatisfied about their own life. This can lead to a negative impact on society.
People who believe social media influencers can have positive impact on society may argue that those influencer can be helpful by introducing some useful products for people. However, I believe that most influencer usually get a sponsorship from companies (Although individuals may argue that some influencer can be helpful by introducing some useful products, products in low quality are often endorsed in real practice.), so that they are ask to advertise those products, in that case, the product introduced by influencer sometimes are not a high quality stuff while people always trust influencer easily. Furthermore, some influencer usually share stuff on social media without try on their own, this behavior is likely a deceit, which is a terrible example for society.(More elaboration on example)
To sum up, even though social media influencer sometimes can be helpful for individuals or societies, I still believe the negative impact they bring to society is more than the positive one.
更改顏色:
紅色: 用字錯誤、冗言贅字
橘色: 文法錯誤
紫色: 邏輯錯誤
藍色: 補述說明
弱弱:
1. 字數稍少(約230字)，盡量寫到350~450個字！
2. topic sentence 一定要寫出「立場」，你的兩段body paragraph都是第一句話講事實、好處，但到第二句話才加入立場，試著把這兩句融合一起(如紫色標注)
3. 寫出來的句子不合乎邏輯，如第二段寫道, “mental problems because of being depressed and unsatisfied” 這讀起來就是”憂鬱症導致心理問題”。憂鬱症不就是心理問題的一種嗎？
4. 你的篇幅不夠是因為可以在「往下寫一點」，第三段你寫到網紅所推出的產品自己的沒試過，然後就對社會來說是個糟糕的例子，寫得太淺。 你可以寫「自身經驗」，例如你買了什麼產品、導致什麼問題、最後怎麼了
錯誤部分–
1. 文法錯誤蠻多的(who are famous)
2.字彙太過口語話(stuff)
The question of whether social media influencers have a positive or negative effect is often debated. This issue has gained attention recently, dividing opinions. In my view, I disagree with the idea that social media influencers have a significant positive impact. This essay will discuss my reasons for this stance and provide examples to support my opinion, leading to a reasoned conclusion.
Firstly, one of the main reasons why I believe influencers have a negative impact is because of the unrealistic lifestyles and standards they promote. For example, many influencers showcase highly curated images of wealth, luxury, and physical perfection, which can create unhealthy comparisons for young people. This clearly demonstrates that such portrayals contribute to body image issues, low self-esteem, and unrealistic expectations, especially among impressionable audiences.
Furthermore, it dawned on me that social media influencers are often detrimental when I consider their profit-driven content. Take product promotions, for example. Influencers often endorse products that they may not personally use or even believe in, simply for financial gain. In addition, this type of marketing can lead to consumers being misled by influencers’ recommendations, prioritizing profits over ethical responsibility.
In conclusion, although there are differing opinions on social media influencers’ impact, I strongly believe that their influence is largely negative based on the reasons discussed above. The evidence and examples provided confirm that their promotion of unrealistic standards and profit-driven motives outweigh any potential benefits they might offer to society.