12/17-IELTS Writing Task 2-Kyle

Humans always live in communities that consist of many people, such as friends and family members, and they are influenced by others. Some people think that family has a high-level position in individual’s life, while others consider that friends are more important than family. From my prospective, I believe that the family plays a more important roles, and reasons will be discussed in following essay.

For one thing, family plays a significant role in human’s childhoods. When babies come to this world, their parents not only grow them up but also accompany them. In addition, family satisfy your demands as soon as possible. For example, parents always give the best option or equipment to their children, because they want their children to enjoy it.(Concrete example) Therefore, it is hard to ignore contributions in child’s life from family.

For another thing, family is a fundamental group in society, and it provides much value to everyone. Some individuals who have babies or old parents are relied on them, and they would be more motivated by their relatives. Moreover, family can boost human’s mental health, because it can fulfill demands, such as a sense of belonging. For instance, chatting with family members after working can relieve stress and waive longliness. Thence, family can increase people’s motivation and prevent mental diseases.

In summary, family is more crucial than friends because of bonding, and it is hard to be replaced. In other words, family has more strong connection and feeling than friends. As a result, family is a basic requirement in our society.

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  1. 1. 藍色標注的地方建議直接寫「實際例子」,不然這樣看起來還停留在引言。例如你可以說: “As I started my college life, I notice the need of laptop since there are plenty of different projects. After being aware of my situation, my parents afforded this purchase and told me that they would support me if there’s anything else essential to education,”

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