4.Do people feel lonelier despite being more connected online?
-first standpoint is excellent. The flow is smooth and the word choice could be a bit harder
– please give specific example for the second standpoint. “I found out that after using social media, times with important ones decrease dramatically and our relationship isn’t as close as before…”
1.How has social media changed the way people communicate?
0.34: deal with issue–> specific: what issue?
2.Do you think social media helps people stay informed?
0.27: updated friends’ lives–> contradict to my set-up standpoint, which is “global event”
Overall, try to speak more chill and lazy sound
4.Do people feel lonelier despite being more connected online?
-first standpoint is excellent. The flow is smooth and the word choice could be a bit harder
– please give specific example for the second standpoint. “I found out that after using social media, times with important ones decrease dramatically and our relationship isn’t as close as before…”
1.How has social media changed the way people communicate?
0.34: deal with issue–> specific: what issue?
2.Do you think social media helps people stay informed?
0.27: updated friends’ lives–> contradict to my set-up standpoint, which is “global event”