Some argue that influencers and youtubers have negative impacts on society due to their luxurious lifestyles and values (,while) Others believe that the contents made from influencers which boosts(strengthen) people’s ambition and provides various information. I firmly agree with the latter argument and believe social media influencers have positive impact on society.
Firstly, with the rapid development of the Internet, influencers have to update and create new videos and posts every day(, and this perseverance could inspire audience). This requires not only passion, but also a high level of self- discipline and innovation. Their consistent effort and determination can inspire others to work hard pursue(toward) their goals. For example, MrBeast, one of the most influential youtubers in the world, becomes a role model for young viewers. Although he was poor in the childhood and has a rare disease until now, the(his) passion and diligent(diligence) contribute to the success. This inspiration encourages people, especially young generation, to believe that success is possible through hard working.
Secondly, influencers often provide various types of knowledge, such as learning skills, beauty tutorials and fitness guidance. We can learn different side of knowledge and know the useful information from them for free, which help audiences to improve their quality of life without spending money. For instance, more and more(increasing) people(individuals) in Taiwan use the contents from social media to learn new skills, such as video editing and makeup. These resources can spark a new interest and even lead to a potential career path. As a result, influencers play a key role in improving people’s the access of knowledge and encourage lifelong learning.
In conclusion, although some people worry about the misinformation and different values from influencers, the inspiration and knowledge from them encourage people and improve quality of life, bring the positive impact on society.
更改顏色:
紅色: 用字錯誤、冗言贅字
橘色: 文法錯誤
紫色: 邏輯錯誤
藍色: 補述說明
讚讚:
1. 整體內容清晰，不會讓讀者讀不懂
弱弱:
1. 字數稍少(約300字)，盡量寫到350~450個字！
2. 第二段的topic sentence要加上自己的立場(如我藍色標注)，很重要！
3. 第三段可以寫更深一點，你說社群媒體可以幫助人學習，啟發新的靈感甚至找尋新的職涯發展，「什麼靈感？」、「什麼職涯發展？」你可以說”I decided to become an English teacher because of some English teaching influencer” 這樣寫得清楚，並有結果。
錯誤部分–
1. 文法錯誤蠻多的(which 使用不當、句子不完整)
2. 單字也有待加強一咪咪
The question of whether social media influencers have a positive or negative effect is often debated. This issue has gained attention recently, dividing opinions. In my view, I disagree with the idea that social media influencers have a significant positive impact. This essay will discuss my reasons for this stance and provide examples to support my opinion, leading to a reasoned conclusion.
Firstly, one of the main reasons why I believe influencers have a negative impact is because of the unrealistic lifestyles and standards they promote. For example, many influencers showcase highly curated images of wealth, luxury, and physical perfection, which can create unhealthy comparisons for young people. This clearly demonstrates that such portrayals contribute to body image issues, low self-esteem, and unrealistic expectations, especially among impressionable audiences.
Furthermore, it dawned on me that social media influencers are often detrimental when I consider their profit-driven content. Take product promotions, for example. Influencers often endorse products that they may not personally use or even believe in, simply for financial gain. In addition, this type of marketing can lead to consumers being misled by influencers’ recommendations, prioritizing profits over ethical responsibility.
In conclusion, although there are differing opinions on social media influencers’ impact, I strongly believe that their influence is largely negative based on the reasons discussed above. The evidence and examples provided confirm that their promotion of unrealistic standards and profit-driven motives outweigh any potential benefits they might offer to society.