3/17-IELTS Writing Task 2-Peggy

The debate over whether family or friends have a more significant impact on people’s lives is ongoing. While some argue that friendships provide companionship and emotional support, other people believe family connections are more impactful and critical. From my perspective, I agree with the latter, and I will elaborate on my reasons below.

One of the main reasons why family holds greater significance than friends is their effect on an individual’s core values and personality. Additionally, their role is to offer a comprehensive and solid support net all the time. From early childhood, parents and elderly family members shape moral beliefs and social behaviors, which influence decision-making throughout life.(Personal experience) Moreover, family remains a reliable source of help(back) during difficult times(in difficulty), such as financial struggles or health and mental issues. While friends may offer emotional accompany and comfort, they may not be able to provide financial assistance without any doubt.

Another reason is that family is more crucial than friends. It is because the family’s connection eventually is unconditional giving without unrealistic or expected returns.(Secondly, I consider family outweighs friend given that family support and tolerate members without high expectation of return.) For instance, raising a child in a supportive family environment requires members to invest extraordinary time and resources in(on) their children’s education and well-being, ensuring their future thriving and building emotional stability. Even during adulthood, individuals are still able to rely on their families for guidance and accompany. (Personal experience) This level of devotion is rarely found in friendships, especially when they are in the worst and intense situation.

In conclusion, while friendships play an essential social bond for individuals, family remains the most unshakable relationship and is regarded as a fundamental support system. The profound impact on various aspects, such as personal development and physical and mental independence for the long term. Therefore, I firmly believe that family plays an irreplaceable role in an individual’s life.

在〈3/17-IELTS Writing Task 2-Peggy〉中有 2 則留言

  1. 1. 第二段、第三段如果加上一些example, personal experience會讓整體更完整

    2. 第三段的topic sentence: “Another reason is that family is more crucial than friends. It is because the family’s connection eventually is unconditional giving without unrealistic or expected returns.” 文法錯誤、句意不完整有點可惜,因為topic sentence是每篇段落的”門面”,這邊如果錯了、讀者看不懂,會失很多分

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